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2016高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文及點(diǎn)評(píng)(大全)
寫(xiě)作不僅考查考生遣詞造句的基本功，還考查考生書(shū)面思想表達(dá)、材料組織和結(jié)構(gòu)安排的邏輯判斷與推理能力。以下是百分網(wǎng)小編搜索整理的關(guān)于2016高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文及點(diǎn)評(píng)(大全)，供參考閱讀，希望對(duì)大家有所幫助!想了解更多相關(guān)信息請(qǐng)持續(xù)關(guān)注我們應(yīng)屆畢業(yè)生考試網(wǎng)!
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假定你是李華，正在英國(guó)接受英語(yǔ)培訓(xùn)，住在一戶英國(guó)人家里。今天你的房東Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你準(zhǔn)備外出，請(qǐng)給Mrs. Wilson 寫(xiě)一留言條，內(nèi)容包括：
1.外出購(gòu)物
2.替房東還書(shū)
3.Tracy 來(lái)電話留言：
1)咖啡屋(Bolton Coffee)見(jiàn)面取消
2)此事已告知Susan
3) 盡快回電
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右;2.可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Mrs. Wilson,
I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文屬于提綱式要點(diǎn)作文，是學(xué)生比較熟悉的題材，體現(xiàn)了英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)應(yīng)該注意實(shí)用性，生活型的原則。行文人稱、時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)、準(zhǔn)確，各個(gè)要點(diǎn)間邏輯連貫，行文通順。提綱類(lèi)書(shū)面表達(dá)不是簡(jiǎn)單的逐條翻譯，而是將所給的幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)合理的組成比較通順的語(yǔ)句，因此要仔細(xì)組織語(yǔ)言，合理安排結(jié)構(gòu)。在語(yǔ)言方面，要特別注意簡(jiǎn)潔明了，開(kāi)頭要開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山。
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情景作文：假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班的學(xué)生李華，為響應(yīng)綠化祖國(guó)的號(hào)召，你班四月十二日去郊區(qū)植樹(shù)，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下四幅圖的先后順序，介紹植樹(shù)活動(dòng)的全過(guò)程，給某英文雜志的“綠色行動(dòng)”專(zhuān)欄寫(xiě)一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”為題的英文稿件。
注意：詞數(shù)不少于60 提示詞：郊區(qū)suburbs
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April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.
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本文是設(shè)計(jì)巧妙的提綱要點(diǎn)式作文，與環(huán)保結(jié)合，立意較好。文章思路清晰，要點(diǎn)連貫，在語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)上選詞新穎，同時(shí)運(yùn)用了分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)等較好的句式表達(dá)。
以上就是小編帶來(lái)的2016高考英語(yǔ)滿分作文范文及名師點(diǎn)評(píng)(一)的詳細(xì)內(nèi)容，希望對(duì)您有所幫助。祝愿同學(xué)們都能取得好成績(jī)。更多精彩內(nèi)容，敬請(qǐng)掃描下方二維碼，關(guān)注愛(ài)教網(wǎng)高考寶典。
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Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.
The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view . However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter and put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively.
We were tired but happy.
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本情景作文的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：1.討論;2.爬山;3.檢拾別人的垃圾;4.投放垃圾。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)可用不同方式表達(dá)。本文覆蓋了所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，較好地完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)。其中，寫(xiě)作主題突出，詳略得當(dāng)，應(yīng)用了較多的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯，而且有效的使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，使全文機(jī)構(gòu)緊湊。本文敘述清楚，描寫(xiě)細(xì)致，準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用了很多富有表現(xiàn)力的詞和句型，例如：“set off early”，“enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view”, ”were shocked to see litter here and there “等，將活動(dòng)的情形很形象地描述了出來(lái)。
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好詞：
1 set off 出發(fā)2. litter n.廢棄物3.respectively adv.分別地
好句：
1.While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view .
在爬山時(shí)，我們享受著溫暖的陽(yáng)光和美麗的風(fēng)景。
2. However, when we reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels.
然而，當(dāng)我們登上山頂，被眼前的一幕驚呆了：瓶子和香蕉皮這樣的廢棄物到處都是。
評(píng)析：細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)，生動(dòng)形象。“shock”一詞也用得生動(dòng)傳神。
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鼠標(biāo)是計(jì)算機(jī)時(shí)代最佳的人機(jī)交互工具之一。它極大地方便了人們的計(jì)算機(jī)操作。但是，過(guò)分依賴鼠標(biāo)的習(xí)慣也會(huì)帶來(lái)一些不利影響。請(qǐng)你以鼠標(biāo)為切入點(diǎn)，根據(jù)下表所提示的信息，用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇短文。
鼠標(biāo)的必要性對(duì)多數(shù)人來(lái)說(shuō)，操作計(jì)算機(jī)，上網(wǎng)沖浪……
鼠標(biāo)的便捷性點(diǎn)擊、移動(dòng)、插入、拷貝、刪除……編輯文本，搜索信息……
收發(fā)郵件，選購(gòu)商品……
點(diǎn)播音樂(lè)，下載電影……
如果過(guò)分依賴鼠標(biāo)…… (請(qǐng)考生結(jié)合自身感受，列舉兩到三點(diǎn))
注意：1.對(duì)所給要點(diǎn)逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯。2.詞數(shù)150左右。開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)。3.作文中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校和本人姓名。
The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer.
For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy, flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.
A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.
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本文為提綱式說(shuō)明文體裁，所選內(nèi)容與我們生活相關(guān)，考生只要把所給要點(diǎn)逐條陳述，適度發(fā)揮，不要逐條翻譯即可。文章說(shuō)理清楚，語(yǔ)言流暢，句式表達(dá)多樣，用詞恰當(dāng)、準(zhǔn)確。不失為一篇滿分作文。
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實(shí)現(xiàn)有效的溝通，建立良好的人際關(guān)系，不僅要善于言表，更要學(xué)會(huì)傾聽(tīng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表中所提供的信息，寫(xiě)一篇題為“Being a Good Listener” 的英文演講稿。
為何傾聽(tīng)表示尊重，增進(jìn)理解，建立良好的人際關(guān)系
誰(shuí)來(lái)傾聽(tīng)家長(zhǎng)傾聽(tīng)孩子理解孩子，消除代溝，……
老師傾聽(tīng)學(xué)生了解學(xué)生，滿足需求，……
同學(xué)相互傾聽(tīng)增進(jìn)友誼，互幫互學(xué)，……
怎樣傾聽(tīng)(請(qǐng)考生聯(lián)系自己擬定內(nèi)容，列舉兩至三點(diǎn)。)
注意：1、 對(duì)所給要點(diǎn)，逐一陳述，適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡(jiǎn)單翻譯。2、 詞數(shù)150左右。開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。3、 演講稿中不得提及考生所在學(xué)校及本人姓名。
Good afternoon, everyone.
The topic of my speech today is “Being a Good Listener”.
Good listening can always show respect, promote understanding, and improve interpersonal relationship.
Many people suggest that parents should listen more to their children, so they will understand them better, and find it easy to narrow the generation gap; teachers should listen more to their students, then they can meet their needs better, and place themselves in a good relationship with their students; students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.
What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others. Show your respect and never stop others till they finish their talk; show you are interested by a supportive silence or a knowing smile; be open-minded to different opinions even though you don’t like them. In a word, good listening can really enable us to get closer to each other.
Thank you for your listening!
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇感情真摯、熱情洋溢的演講稿，文中大量運(yùn)用排比句型，不但準(zhǔn)確流暢地表達(dá)出題目中所提供的信息，而且體現(xiàn)出作者熟練運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)的能力以及不俗的文采。第三段中所使用的相同結(jié)構(gòu)的復(fù)合句式，將傾聽(tīng)的對(duì)象及其作用闡述得淋漓盡致;而第四段中用一系列的祈使句議論應(yīng)如何傾聽(tīng)，則更進(jìn)一步地增強(qiáng)了這篇演說(shuō)稿的說(shuō)服力。
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好詞：
1.promote v .促進(jìn) 2. interpersonal adj.人際的
3. generation gap. 代溝 4. open-minded adj. 虛心的
好句：
1. students should listen more to their classmates, thus they will help and learn from each other, and a friendship is likely to be formed.
同學(xué)之間應(yīng)該互相傾聽(tīng)，這樣他們可以互相學(xué)習(xí)和幫助，也會(huì)形成友誼。
評(píng)析：復(fù)雜句的組合，被動(dòng)句的使用。
2. What I want to stress is that each of us should listen to others.
我想強(qiáng)調(diào)的是我們每個(gè)人都應(yīng)該更多的傾聽(tīng)他人。
評(píng)析：復(fù)合句的使用。
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2007年4月29日上午10點(diǎn)到11點(diǎn)，全國(guó)億萬(wàn)學(xué)生陽(yáng)光體育活動(dòng)在各地大中小學(xué)校同時(shí)進(jìn)行，江蘇省1，100萬(wàn)學(xué)生積極參與了這項(xiàng)活動(dòng)。
教育部倡導(dǎo)學(xué)生：
每天鍛煉一小時(shí)
健康工作五十年
幸福生活一輩子
請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以上提示，用英語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)備一份發(fā)言稿，向同學(xué)們講述一下陽(yáng)光體育活動(dòng)的有關(guān)情況，并就高三學(xué)生是否需要每天花一小時(shí)鍛煉，談?wù)勀愕目捶袄碛伞?/p>
注意：1、發(fā)言稿應(yīng)包括以上所有信息，要有適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。2、詞數(shù)：120左右。發(fā)言稿的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。3、參考詞匯：陽(yáng)光體育活動(dòng)——a national student sports program;教育部——the Ministry of Education
Good afternoon, everyone,
The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.
The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.
In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!
Thank you!
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文的結(jié)構(gòu)十分明晰，同時(shí)句式使用得熟練而準(zhǔn)確。本文分為三段，前兩段敘述，后一段發(fā)表觀點(diǎn)，典型的作文結(jié)構(gòu)。在句式使用上，作者用法多樣，使用了獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)和虛擬語(yǔ)氣，十分出彩。復(fù)雜的句式是本文的特點(diǎn)之一。
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好詞：
1.wage v.發(fā)動(dòng);2.aim v.瞄準(zhǔn);3. advocate v.提倡
好句：
1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.
教育部提倡我們每天做一個(gè)小時(shí)的運(yùn)動(dòng)，能夠健康地活50年。
評(píng)析：advocate，其后接虛擬語(yǔ)氣，可以省略情態(tài)動(dòng)詞。
2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.
如果我們不進(jìn)行運(yùn)動(dòng)，我們的學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)就不會(huì)很好。
評(píng)析：虛擬語(yǔ)氣。
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假定你是李華，從小喜愛(ài)大熊貓(panda),一直通過(guò)有關(guān)網(wǎng)站(website)關(guān)注三年前在美國(guó)圣迭哥動(dòng)物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳”和她的母親“白云”�，F(xiàn)在蘇琳即將三歲。請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)給動(dòng)物園工作人員寫(xiě)一封信：
1、 自我介紹; 2、祝賀蘇琳生日; 3、感謝工作人員; 4、索取蘇琳三歲生日照。
注意：1、詞數(shù)100左右;2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫;3、開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。
Dear Sir/Madam,
Greetings from China!
I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
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本文寫(xiě)作的內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：1.自我介紹;2.信息來(lái)源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結(jié)尾。
這封信格式正確，行文規(guī)范，描述有條不紊，稱呼、正文中的開(kāi)頭及結(jié)尾、結(jié)束語(yǔ)均表達(dá)到位。文章行文活潑，感情真摯，語(yǔ)言表述準(zhǔn)確，洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對(duì)美方人員的感激之情，以及希望自己愿望成真，得到照片的希冀之情。長(zhǎng)短句運(yùn)用合理，結(jié)合了簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)合句，流暢自然，不露痕跡，的確是一篇佳作。
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好詞：
1.delighted adj.欣喜的，快樂(lè)的;2.express v.表達(dá);
3.give birth to v.產(chǎn)生，生育
好句:
I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
我祝福它生日快樂(lè)并且對(duì)你們的辛勤工作表達(dá)我的感激之情，正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國(guó)過(guò)著幸福和健康的生活。
評(píng)析：定語(yǔ)從句的使用。
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假設(shè)你是卜曼宜，你購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部某外國(guó)公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī)，因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)題，要求該公司更換。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)，用英文寫(xiě)一封電子郵件。
要點(diǎn)
1. 問(wèn)題：手機(jī)不響鈴，不能發(fā)短信;該產(chǎn)品已售完，無(wú)法更換;型號(hào)新，無(wú)配件，無(wú)法維修。
2. 要求：公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)為100左右;2. 參考詞匯：配件—— spare part;3. 電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好(不計(jì)入你所寫(xiě)詞數(shù));4.已給出的電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡。
Dear Sir，
I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.
Thank you for your consideration.
Sincerely yours,
Bu Manyi
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)齊全，語(yǔ)言豐富，結(jié)構(gòu)合理，如頭兩句說(shuō)明了購(gòu)買(mǎi)手機(jī)后發(fā)現(xiàn)故障的情況，中間部分說(shuō)明了無(wú)法維修而必須讓公司更換手機(jī)的原委，最后明確提出自己的要求，明白流暢，將題目所提出的要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)清楚，較好的完成了任務(wù)。全文以一般過(guò)去時(shí)為基調(diào)，結(jié)合主動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)與被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)，并使用了so, but, therefore 等連接詞，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)完整嚴(yán)密。固定短語(yǔ)，如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用，使文章的語(yǔ)言顯得地道而精煉。
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好詞：
1. disappointment n.失望;2.desperate adj.絕望的;
3. consideration n.體諒
好句：
To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.
令我失望的是，他說(shuō)因?yàn)樵谥袊?guó)是新款手機(jī)，所以沒(méi)有配件來(lái)修理。
評(píng)析：復(fù)雜句的組織; to my disappointment, 常用短語(yǔ)。
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一家賓館新開(kāi)業(yè)，為吸引外國(guó)賓客，希望在互聯(lián)網(wǎng)上進(jìn)行宣傳。請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)為其 寫(xiě)一篇文字介紹。主要內(nèi)容包括：
1.地點(diǎn)：距白山入口處500米;
2.房間及價(jià)格：?jiǎn)稳碎g(共20間)，100元/天;雙人間(共15間)，150元/天;熱水淋浴;
3.餐飲：餐廳(中、西餐)，咖啡廳(茶、咖啡);
4.游泳池：全天免費(fèi)開(kāi)放;
5.歡迎預(yù)定。
注意：1.詞數(shù)100左右，開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好;2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，首先點(diǎn)明了主旨。本文最大的特點(diǎn)是應(yīng)用了很多比較復(fù)雜的句式，使文章比較出彩。開(kāi)頭使用了獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)交代賓館位置。which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句的使用也很正確�？偟貋�(lái)說(shuō)，文章句式精煉，是篇不錯(cuò)的滿分作文。
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好詞：1. provide v.提供;2. convenience n.便利
好句：
All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.
所有這些服務(wù)都會(huì)給你帶來(lái)便利，并且非常的愉快。
評(píng)析：bring great convenience，帶來(lái)便利。
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假如你是李華，美國(guó)一所友好學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備與你們學(xué)校共同創(chuàng)辦一份中學(xué)生英文刊物，該校格林先生來(lái)信詢問(wèn)有關(guān)情況。請(qǐng)你給她寫(xiě)封回信，假如你是李華，美國(guó)一所友好學(xué)校準(zhǔn)備與你們學(xué)校共同創(chuàng)辦一份中學(xué)生英文刊物，該校格林先生來(lái)信詢問(wèn)有關(guān)情況。
請(qǐng)你給她寫(xiě)封回信，主要內(nèi)容如下：1、表示贊成。2、提出你喜歡的欄目。3、簡(jiǎn)要說(shuō)明理由。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右。2. 新的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好。3. 適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。4. 參考欄目：欄目—column
Dear Mr. Green,
I am very excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine together. That sounds great! And I definitely agree with you on that.
Some of the columns which you mentioned in the letter are really my cup of tea. Say, “culture express” gives us a better understanding of the world. Since people from different parts of the world have different values, it’s necessary to learn from each other. This will offer a wonderful chance. Apart from that, “blurt out” is pretty good for Chinese students to learn English idioms and improve oral English. Last but not least, “entertainment” is so cool! The popular singers, actors and celebrities are so catchy and attractive that you absolutely can’t miss it! Teenagers are just fond of the trendy things.
Well, I can’t list more. I really can’t wait to read that magazine!
Yours faithfully,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
這是一篇滿分作文。由于這篇作文的出現(xiàn)，導(dǎo)致了安徽省今年的英語(yǔ)作文分?jǐn)?shù)普遍偏低。仔細(xì)分析了這篇文章，寫(xiě)的的確是好，很地道的美式英語(yǔ)，一些詞語(yǔ)的大膽使用，讓人不得不猜測(cè)此人或者是家人可能有過(guò)國(guó)外生活的經(jīng)歷，否則這么地道標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的英語(yǔ)，可不是一朝一夕所能寫(xiě)出來(lái)的。
比如說(shuō)：my cup of tea, apart from that, oral English, last but not least, celebrities, catchy和trendy的大膽運(yùn)用，list, can't wait to 簡(jiǎn)直是perfect! 況且文章中沒(méi)有一個(gè)錯(cuò)誤，不管是書(shū)寫(xiě)還是語(yǔ)法。英語(yǔ)能夠?qū)W到這種程度，不可謂不讓人佩服。
【試題回放】
據(jù)報(bào)道，7歲的美國(guó)女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后處于極度的痛苦之中，美國(guó)抗癌協(xié)會(huì)(ACS)決定，每當(dāng)Amy收到一封慰問(wèn)信，就給她增加3美分的治療款。
假如你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生李華，請(qǐng)你用英文給Amy寫(xiě)一封慰問(wèn)信，主要內(nèi)容包括：自我介紹;得知的情況;表示鼓勵(lì);打算為她做什么;祝她早日康復(fù)。
注意：1. 信的格式已為你寫(xiě)好.2. 信中不得出現(xiàn)你的真實(shí)情況。3. 詞數(shù)100左右。4. 請(qǐng)?jiān)诖痤}卡上作答。
Dear Amy,
I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
【名師點(diǎn)評(píng)】
本文依照要求，涵蓋了所有要點(diǎn)。文章使用了高中常見(jiàn)的句式，如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比較好。作者對(duì)定語(yǔ)從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章，行文自然而通順，值得學(xué)習(xí)。
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好詞：
1.realize v.意識(shí)到;2.promise v.允諾;
3.donate v.捐贈(zèng)
好句：
1、I‘m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌，給你帶來(lái)了巨大的痛苦。
好處：which引導(dǎo)限制性定語(yǔ)從句。
2、So, stand up and fight against the disease!
因此，堅(jiān)強(qiáng)地與疾病做斗爭(zhēng)吧!
好處：擲地有聲，語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確。
假設(shè)你是李華，你的英國(guó)筆友Bob將于九月到你所在城市的建新華文學(xué)校學(xué)中文，來(lái)信請(qǐng)你在學(xué)校附近為他找一套住房。請(qǐng)根據(jù)圖畫(huà)提供的信息，寫(xiě)信介紹住房的情況，并告知住房面積為25平方米，月租500元。
注意：1、詞數(shù)：100左右;2、參考詞匯：房租—Tent(n.).
— 1 —
I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.
Hope you will come here soon!
All the best!
Yours,
Li Hua
滿分理由：本文格式正確，意思表述完整，行文流暢自然。作者在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中注意長(zhǎng)短句并用，還使用了以‘which，’引導(dǎo)的非限定性定語(yǔ)從句，從而使文章層次分明，富于變化，不愧為考場(chǎng)佳作。
— 2 —
Dear Bob,
Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.
I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.
Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport,see you.
Best wishes !
Yours,
Li Hua
滿分理由：本文格式正確，內(nèi)容完整，表述清楚，銜接緊密流暢，時(shí)態(tài)語(yǔ)態(tài)使用準(zhǔn)確，特別是結(jié)尾末段適度的發(fā)揮，既充實(shí)了內(nèi)容，又符合邏輯，成為本文與眾不同的亮點(diǎn)。
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Dear Bob,
How are you these days?
I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.
There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find another place for you.
Yours,
Li Hua
滿分理由：本文內(nèi)在邏輯性很強(qiáng)，由遠(yuǎn)及近。由外及內(nèi)，層次分明，錯(cuò)落有致。同時(shí)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句運(yùn)用得恰到好處，很出彩，再則結(jié)構(gòu)完整，從開(kāi)頭的問(wèn)候語(yǔ)到結(jié)尾都很完備。
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Dear Bob,
I’m glad to hear from you.
Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you.
The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.
It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.
Will you be satisfied with this flat, or you want another one? Just let me know. I’ll try my best to help you.
Yours,
Li Hua
滿分理由：本文內(nèi)容詳實(shí)，描述具體細(xì)膩，用詞適當(dāng)準(zhǔn)確，如“suitable house”、“not far from’’等，另外文中的選擇疑問(wèn)句也很有新意。
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